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24 Apr 14

Hello, World
For as much as I like the sentiments of this first post, I don't think it serves you or your blog all that well. I recommend a different intro - -get into your main topic sooner -- let your idealism shine through the way you talk about Africa and serving humanity.

Profile
This is a strong post that does a good job characterizing the blog and the blogger. Good overall organization. At times, this post feels hurried. I think it has something to do with your transitions from topic to topic. Take a look at those as you revise.

Voice post:
Lots of good observations here. These posts could use some clear synopses of the posts before you begin your close reading. Don't assume your readers will follow your links.

Keep working to find and accentuate your voice. Also, I keep feeling claustrophobic in your layout.
Grade: B+

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  • n serving and bettering the lives of others. Although this altruism seems idealistic, I know that truly loving and caring for people can completely transform their lives
  • May 2014, I am traveling to Adyege village (northern Ugan

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24 Apr 14

Morgan Freeman voiceover generator

23 Apr 14

Hello, World,
Good start to this post. You certainly have an interesting topic. Give more of a sense of your point of view and what that will add to the discussion.

Profile Post:
Stronger post. Good choice of blog. Keep working to characterize her point of view. Also, work to weave in the answers to my questions -- rather than just tacking them on.


You voice: Good use of parentheticals throughout.

Proofread all these carefully. You may want to print them out. You're adding "the" -- definite article -- where it's not required.

Voice Post:
This post needs the most work. While you have found a blogger whose posts are dripping with voice, you do not analyze the way she creates that voice. Focus on diction, phrasing, punctuation -- all those techniques that create a sense of her character.
Grade: C+

  • <div class="region-inner main-inner"><div class="columns fauxcolumns"><div class="columns-inner"><div class="column-center-outer"><div class="column-center-inner"><div class="main section" id="main"><div class="widget Blog" id="Blog1"><div class="blog-posts hfeed"><div class="date-outer"><div class="date-posts"><div class="post-outer"><div class="post hentry uncustomized-post-template" itemprop="blogPost" itemscope="itemscope" itemtype="http://schema.org/BlogPosting"><div class="post-body entry-content" itemprop="description articleBody" id="post-body-717438580664756779"><div class="MsoNormal"><div class="MsoNormal" style="mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-pagination: none; text-autospace: none;"><div class="MsoNormal"><span style="color: #595959; font-family: Arial; mso-themecolor: text1; mso-themetint: 166;"> the<br/>oft-lamented outcome of the sexual revolution, scourge of our era, and sole<br/>reason why 7-year-old girls can now purchase padded bikini tops at Abercrombie<br/>&amp; Fitch — we almost always talk about everything women have lost since the<br/>good ol' days when women were protected by their fathers and husbands.”<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #1a1a1a; font-family: Arial;">In this<br/>sentence, Katie grabs the audience with her sarcastic wording. Her sarcasm sparkles<br/>through her writing when she refers to the population being in a sexual<br/>revolution. I feel as if she is insinuating that the generation today does not<br/>have any morals and in one why or another, this culture is very… slutty. She<br/>also make the reference that men these days are not doing their jobs when it<br/>comes to protecting women and their “pureness.” Although the next part of the<br/>first paragraph is somewhat contradicting:<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #595959; font-family: Arial; mso-themecolor: text1; mso-themetint: 166;">“But what about everything women have <i>gained</i><br/>thanks to the ability to dabble in relationships without putting other<br/>ambitions on hold?”<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="font-family: Arial;">I can tell by Katie’s voice<br/>that she is starting to contradict herself, wondering if maybe having nothing<br/>more than just a hookup is a great thing; a woman can focus on herself and<br/>pursue her dreams. She is beginning to wonder and contemplate the differences between<br/>relationships now and relationships in the old days where women had to put<br/>everything on hold in order to have a husband and kids. This sentence is the<br/>beginning of her feministic attitude toward life and it is shown in the<br/>following sentence: <o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="font-family: Arial;">“<span style="color: #595959; mso-themecolor: text1; mso-themetint: 166;">Our culture's obsession with the way<br/>"hookup culture" purportedly debases women, as if women have no say<br/>in the matter, has always made me frustrated and angry, because neither I nor<br/>any of my 20 and 30-something friends have ever felt fucked over by our ability<br/>to sleep with whomever we want when we want to.”<o:p></o:p></span></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #1a1a1a; font-family: Arial;">Katie is a<br/>feminist. I can hear her feministic attitude within every single word she says.<br/>At this point Katie is starting to get worked up when she states, “that none of<br/>her friends have ever felt fucked over by the ability to sleep with whomever<br/>she wants and whenever she wants.” She doesn’t like being told what she can and<br/>can’t do. She makes her own choices especially when it comes to whom she sleeps<br/>with. As I mention in the beginning of this post, Katie is extremely<br/>opinionated and when she has a view on something, she will almost die defending<br/>it. She is now beginning to like the hookup culture shown in this sentence:<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #595959; font-family: Arial; mso-themecolor: text1; mso-themetint: 166;">“Hookup culture" — which essentially just means<br/>having a fair amount of sex without monogamy, right Patti Stanger?”<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="font-family: Arial;">She is mocking Patti Stanger<br/>from Bravo’s hit show “Millionaire Matchmaker.” On every show Patti also tells<br/>her clients, “No sex before monogamy.” I can only imagine Katie rolling her<br/>eyes and mocking Patti out loud. Her tone of voice is basically saying that the<br/>hookup culture is bullshit and she can have all of the sex she wants. Women<br/>control the access to sex. Katie says:<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #7f7f7f; font-family: Arial; mso-themecolor: text1; mso-themetint: 128;">“Hookup culture" (god, we really need another<br/>phrase for this, anyone have any ideas?)”<o:p></o:p></span></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><br></div><br/><div class="MsoNormal"><br/><span style="color: #1a1a1a; font-family: Arial;">This sentence<br/>is a great representation of Katie’s attitude. She doesn’t feel that the hookup<br/>culture is a bad thing because it allows for women to “dip into relationships<br/>without disrupting their self development or school work. 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  • escapade;
  • Every one knows and sees those smoking hot sex scenes that are displayed all over the television sure are hard to miss

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23 Apr 14

Hello, World
Good work, Austin. This is an engaging post. One way to make it even more engaging is to replace some of the general language with more concrete examples, hypotheticals, stats, et cetera. Also, see where you can say things more succinctly, though of course your somewhat elaborate diction is your signature style.

Profile Post:
Good post. This is thoughtful and interesting. It lacks a little of the engagement of your voice post. You do all of the tasks and do have a larger idea, but the example posts, for example, don't illustrate your larger theme as well as they could. Consider describing more posts to emphasize the impact of a plurality of voices. Otherwise, good careful work.

Voice post:
Good solid writing throughout this post.  Well-framed, good examples.  

Grade: A

  • ribe me as an average student from an average family living an average life in sunny Southern California. Yet, from another perspective I am one the happiest, most privileged, wealthy and well-educated individuals in the world. The many barriers between me and the rest of the world create an illusion of normalcy, effectively concealing the relative opulence I live in. Coming to terms with my own ignorance to the disparity in living conditions in my own backyard has inspired me to dig deeper into the concept of inequality and its greater implications.  
  • dead-set on becoming a doctor, a class I took in my first semester opened my eyes to the potential for impact the field of global health offers. Since then I have invested my energies into acquiring the tools I believe to be necessary for impact through studying Global Health and Mathematics/Economics. Professionally, I am interested in Health Metrics and Evaluation, particularly in developing settings. I am optimistic about the future, but plagued by the lingering fear that widespread suffering is intrinsic to human existence.
  • the necessary ethical shift

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18 Apr 14

"Society for Literature, Science, and the Arts
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